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Fic: Barriers Both, Flesh and Stone (NC17) 
6th-Oct-2008 08:34 pm
Back to school by naadi
Author: rurounihime
Title: Barriers Both, Flesh and Stone
Pairings: H/D; (past H/G, D/A, D/OMC, H/OMC)
Rating: NC-17
Era: Post-DH epilogue
Summary: An educational experiment turns disastrous.
Total word count: 56,596

Original prompt request number: 149
Third prompt at link

Disclaimer: This story is based on characters and situations created and owned by JK Rowling, various publishers including but not limited to Bloomsbury Books, Scholastic Books and Raincoast Books, and Warner Bros. Inc. No money is being made and no copyright or trademark infringement is intended.

Author’s notes: So this little bundle of joy grew up to be a bonafide monster capable of stomping cities flat with its immense feet. Should have been a chapter fic… khateh, I hope you enjoy this story! Thanks SO MUCH to my betas!
Betas: fireelemental79 and coffeejunkii

Barriers Both, Flesh and Stone


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Comments 
6th-Oct-2008 09:06 pm (UTC)
Guh, I absolutely adored this. All the magic and the experimenting and God, how it turned out. So original and lovely and just a treat to read! I loved how you incorporated the pensieve memories into the whole spell to create the atmosphere. To be honest, I was very interested to read a fic on how that spellwould have panned out if it was successful! It was such an interesting idea!

The characters you created were fantastic as well. The bit that has stuck in my memory clearest was Goyle's test, I adored that, how you explored an under-represented character so well! Also, Pansy ♥. I loved this little subplot, it was fantastic. The presence of Scorpius was amazing, I just loved how ANGRY he was but I was so happy that he and Draco had begun to reconcile by the end! I did wonder where Ron was, but I did speed through this, so I think I missed that bit lol.

Mmm and the H/D as well, so nice and slowly progressing thatmade the relationship development seem very realistic and like it was meant to happen. Plus the sexing was hot as well ;) ♥

Absolutely amazing fic, just the kind of thing I was looking forward to at the beginning of this fest! ♥♥♥♥♥
30th-Oct-2008 03:33 am (UTC)
To be honest, I was very interested to read a fic on how that spellwould have panned out if it was successful!

Yeah, I'm actually kind of wistful that I didn't end up writing THAT story. I'm curious too! I based it off a program my high school did, called Every Fifteen Minutes. It addressed the number of teenagers who were killed in car accidents. They had a grim reaper character who would go to each classroom and remove a student, and then their "obituary" would be posted in the main hallway. They also staged a big car wreck on the field out back. It was all to strengthen our awareness of the number of deaths. Very effective. Definitely one of the more vivid memories I have of high school.

You know, I'm actually very surprised that most people were so affected by Goyle's test! It just strikes me as intriguing. I wasn't expecting to get such vehement feedback on his character! THank you.

Man, the Mystery of the Missing Ron... Yeah, I tried to get him in here, but he just wasn't fitting, and I realized pretty quickly that there was no real place for him in my story. If I hadn't been trying to work toa deadline, I probably could have played around with things a little more, but in the end, he just didn't make an appearance. Which is definitely odd. I'm sorry for that. My working excuse is that Draco's primary POV really didn't give Ron any notice. But I know that's weak, hahaha.

Thank you so much for reading and for leaving me such a nice review!
6th-Oct-2008 10:33 pm (UTC)
Well, I dunno about the fic stomping cities flat with its immense feet, but it certainly stomped me flat with its immense scale and how awesome it is! Intricate plot but so very passionate - I think I love that about your work most of all - the intense passionate language and the way you never go at anything half-hearted. When you have your characters do something it's always vibrant with stunning imagery that makes them come alive. You deal with them with such care and love that it takes my breath away every time I read something you've written. Your Draco is amazing and I love how vulnerable you make him but how strong he is under everything. I adore your Harry and how despite himself he just can't help doing the right thing.

I loved how you didn't skimp on words and leave out all the other characters and their journeys, too, because it really fleshed out the desperation that everyone felt when the children were missing.

Just a wonderful, wonderful rich and imaginative story, told by a master story teller. Thank you so much, lovely, for sharing this with us.
30th-Oct-2008 03:26 am (UTC)
Gah, you say "intricate plot"... It just about flattened ME. Hahahaha! I was thinking that I'd bitten off way more than I could chew...

the way you never go at anything half-hearted

Thank you so much! This means a lot- a LOT- to me. I really appreciate this statement.

I loved how you didn't skimp on words and leave out all the other characters and their journeys

Oh, I am so relieved that you liked this aspect. I was a little afeared that it would take away from the H/D of the story, but when I considered leaving it all out, it just seemed like there would be these huge holes in the plot. I'm so glad you liked the other characters.

Thank you so much for such a nice comment! ^__^ *hugs*
6th-Oct-2008 11:38 pm (UTC)
What she said. A fantastic story, beautifully plotted and written, with wonderful characterisation. Well worth staying up this late for - couldn't go to bed until I finished it and I have work in the morning! Thank you for sharing.
23rd-Oct-2008 05:16 am (UTC)
Thank you so much for staying up late to read my fic! Hahaha, that's a wonderful treat. I'm so happy you enjoyed it so much! It was a fun one to write, even if it did take a bazillion years. ^_^
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23rd-Oct-2008 05:17 am (UTC)
Oh, it warms my heart to read your comments on Scorpius the cute rebel! He was a lot of fun to write in this story. Letting teenagers lash out in stories can be very therapeutic! I'm so glad you liked the fic. Thank you for your comment!
7th-Oct-2008 01:32 am (UTC)
That was...epic...and deep...many thanks for sharing.
23rd-Oct-2008 05:17 am (UTC)
Aww, thank you for reading and for letting me know you liked it!

And I love your penguin icon. ^_^
7th-Oct-2008 04:14 am (UTC)
what a fantastic story! Loved your characterization and the wonderful ideas for the plot! I especially enjoyed how the reader was able to experience each character's pain and fear, and ultimately a resolution.

*memories*
23rd-Oct-2008 05:18 am (UTC)
Oh, thank you for reading, and for investing yourself in the story as you have! I really appreciate that you felt along with the characters. That makes it all worth it, to hear that. Thank you!
7th-Oct-2008 04:23 am (UTC)
I started this way too late at night to leave a coherent review, so I will just say I loved it. It was the most satisfying fic I've read in a long time.
I never guess who the authors are in these fests because I'm just terrible at guessing, but I actually think I know who you are. This is written in a style that seems so familiar. Oh well, it doesn't really matter if I'm right or wrong. It was such a beautiful read.
23rd-Oct-2008 05:19 am (UTC)
Ahahaha, I like incoherent reviews too, but I really like the fact that you stayed up late to finish the story! That's a great compliment. Thank you!

And... were you right about me? *is curious*
7th-Oct-2008 04:42 am (UTC)
I can't even begin to list all of the things I loved about this amazing story. Such a thorough story-telling, with amazing characterizations of the Slytherins, making them human in a way I rarely see. This was absolutely gorgeous.
23rd-Oct-2008 05:21 am (UTC)
Thank you so very much for leaving me this comment about my fic! I really appreciate hearing your thoughts. And you liked the Slytherins! That's the cherry on top of my sundae. I love Slytherins. Thank you!
7th-Oct-2008 04:43 am (UTC)
This was just absolutely amazing. I enjoyed not just the twist in the storyline, but also the individualization of all of the characters, sub ones: Pansy, Goyle, Nott; and the main ones. Meeting the founders was amazing, although Slytherin was more than a little creepy. :) Watching the characters, and the reader, really, truly understand that there is more to the house system than meets the eye. Several fics mention that characteristics of each house can be found within a single person, but this really took that to heart and demonstrated, not just told, how the system, and definitions of characteristics, was supposed to be set-up.
This was so thrilling to read, and I'm pleased to mention that by the time the reveals are posted, I'll be anxious to see what else you've written. Thanks for such an amazing story!
30th-Oct-2008 03:41 am (UTC)
Meeting the founders was amazing, although Slytherin was more than a little creepy.

Wahahaha, I know! Originally I had him as this more understanding individual (not much more, but a little), and then I was reminded that he and Godric had a big friendship-breaking fight, and that Slyth was kind of a nasty sort of person. So I made him more threatening. But it makes me wonder: do portraits reflect the person they were when they died or do they reflect the person they were at a certain point in their life? Because if so, that would make things more interesting, I think. :)

the reader, really, truly understand that there is more to the house system than meets the eye.

Oh, the way you've worded it here (and in the rest of your review) is wonderful! In some respects I think the completely split house system was a big mistake, but in others, I see the potential for strengthening different things about different people, perhaps in the hopes of making a more effective team of friends. Alas, it didn't turn out that way at all, and all the houses just grew apart, mostly. But I really do think that there is more to it, that the separation into different houses is just part of it all. There is always more to someone than one characteristic. I'm so happy you liked that part!

Thank you for reading, and for leaving me such a nice review. ^_^
7th-Oct-2008 05:21 am (UTC)
Oh, this fic is amazing. It's rich, vibrant, heady...the plot is so thick and the characters so real. I couldn't tear myself away from it. Literally. It's 2:18 AM now, and I've been in front of the computer for hours...but it's definitely been time well spent!

I loved the connection between Harry and Draco. It was just so there...it was almost tangible. The love scenes were hot and beautiful and desperate and needy, and absolutely fabulous.

Really well written, well thought out, well delivered. Probably my favourite fic of the fest!!!
23rd-Oct-2008 05:23 am (UTC)
Thank you for spending all that time reading! Hahaha, I was worried about the length, partly because it was taking me so long to finish the story, and partly because I thought it would be a turn off to readers. I'm so thankful you finished it!

Probably my favourite fic of the fest!!!

Awww, thank you! *hugs*
7th-Oct-2008 06:38 am (UTC)
I would say this fest saved the best for last. I am completely incoherent as it's hours past my bedtime, but this was a masterpiece. I loved the mythology you've created here from scratch; it felt real. Thank you.
23rd-Oct-2008 05:26 am (UTC)
I would say this fest saved the best for last.

That is such a nice thing to say. Thank you so much!

I loved the mythology you've created here from scratch

I love any excuse to delve into and create magical theory. It's such a rich area to work in. I'm so glad you liked it!
7th-Oct-2008 07:48 am (UTC)
This was unbelievable. The idea, the tests, the characters and the way the story flowed - everything was perfect.
I wanted to know what was going on, but then, I didn't want it to be over :)
Scorpius' anger was so real and even if I didn't agree with him, I couldn't hold it against him. I think your portrayal of Scorpius was brilliant. I felt really bad for Pansy and was very proud of Greg :)
I loved every bit of this and I'll have to let my thoughts cool down a bit before i can say something coherent. But I really, really love this.
Thank you for taking my prompt and making it into something so wonderful
30th-Oct-2008 03:45 am (UTC)
Your prompt was perfect. I had these little vague inklings of an idea, just tiny slivers that didn't amount to much, and then your prompt just filled in a ton of the blanks. And it was such a simple prompt, too! I mean that it wasn't too dictatorial about what the story was or wasn't supposed to be, and I really appreciate that.

Scorpius was interesting to write. He really wanted to be a brat, and that was a lot of fun. But he's a good kid at heart, just a struggling good kid, and that was the best part of it. I really enjoyed writing this story, and I'm so happy you enjoyed what I did with your prompt! Thank you for giving me such a good one to work with!
7th-Oct-2008 08:32 am (UTC)
Completely loved this! It was great and I liked the fact that all the charas that made past mistakes got a chance to confront them and become whole human being again. It was lovely and a beautiful way to show the characters' redemption.
23rd-Oct-2008 05:27 am (UTC)
all the charas that made past mistakes got a chance to confront them and become whole human being again

I really like the way you've worded this. There do indeed seem to be pieces missing from these characters. Thank you for putting it into such a thought-provoking form! ^_^ Thank you for reading, and definitely thank you for leaving me this comment!
7th-Oct-2008 08:48 am (UTC)
There are so many things to discuss about this excellent fic... but I'll pick just two that really affected me the most.

First and foremost, my sympathy goes to Pansy. After finishing the story, I just couldn't get her out of my mind. Even though she and Estelle are minor characters in this one, their storyline was the one that struck the chords inside me so deeply and so strongly that I even wept for them. I saw her confrontation with Hufflepuff as something very touching and bittersweet, and I wish things would be all right with her and her daughter after this.

Secondly, I find Harry's outburst about how him having to carry the responsibility of vanquishing Voldemort very emotional. What he told Draco, his anger, and subsequently his remorse for wanting to give the children a taste of what he felt and the retraction of his opinions... all of them made me feel like I was suffocating, because that's exactly what I feel about Harry having to carry the burden alone. The way he was portrayed throughout the story was very appealing, though. He came across as someone who was strong and confident... especially in the beginning. And I love how he handled Draco's hysteria. This is how I envisioned him having grown into adulthood. And pardon me for assuming, but I like to think that it was Harry who had rubbed off his Gryffindorish courage to Draco... well, perhaps Draco already had the kind of courage that made Godric say that Draco would've made an exemplary Gryffindor, but I don't think he would've been able to come to that point or way of thinking without Harry's help.

Subsequently, I admire the intricacies of the story. It's one of the more complicated stories I've read in this fest, perhaps even ever, but I definitely enjoyed the ride. The language flowed so smoothly and I scrolled down and passed each paragraph with an ever growing curiosity that made me want to know more, more and more. Simply put, this is a brilliant piece of writing.

Congratulations for writing such a wonderful piece, thanks for sharing this with us and I'm glad such a wonderful fic has been chosen to end the parade of great works that came out of the Back to School Fest.
9th-Nov-2008 06:27 am (UTC)
This is such a great review. I really appreciate how much time you took to write this about my story! It's wonderful!

I personally connected with Pansy the most, I think, and I'm glad you found her story engrossing. And I'm somewhat curious about what happens after the end of this fic. It would be a neat topic to explore.

What he told Draco, his anger, and subsequently his remorse for wanting to give the children a taste of what he felt and the retraction of his opinions... all of them made me feel like I was suffocating, because that's exactly what I feel about Harry having to carry the burden alone.

This was an interesting segment to write. Harry's admissions were not planned at all. I was writing his first answer to Draco's request for distraction, and then suddenly he was really angry, and then he was retracting it, and I was like, whoa, dude, slow down! But it ended up being a great scene for him, and I'm so happy you picked it as a favorite.

Simply put, this is a brilliant piece of writing.

Thank you! You are so nice!
7th-Oct-2008 12:57 pm (UTC)
Outstanding piece of work. The emotions of everyone involved and the relationship dynamics were so well explored. I loved the rescues, how each character had to deal with their demons to save their child and how Goyle was the first. Pansy's story was heartbreaking. Draco and Scorpius's relationship and how broken they were.
Harry having to wait outside, trust others to rescue his son- the ultimate task for him.
The Harry/Draco fit so seamlessly into the story that it was just one small part of such a fantastic work.
Wonderful, I can't wait to re-read it.
30th-Oct-2008 03:48 am (UTC)
Harry having to wait outside, trust others to rescue his son- the ultimate task for him.

In a lot of ways, I think this was the weakest aspect of the story for me. I had a hard time getting Harry's test hinted at properly, and then making sure I spent enough time on him, because it was really Draco's story, even though everyone else was there. And Draco's mind was so narowed on his son that by the time I read through my first draft, I realized that Harry's test was barely even there, almost a deus ex machina, and it was a big worry to me. I'm really happy that you liked that aspect of the story, that it worked for you. Thank you so much for leaving me such a nice review. I really appreciate it.
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