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Fic: Negotiations (PG15) 
4th-Oct-2008 06:15 pm
hogwarts stairs
Author: tweetiescueetie
Title: Negotiations
Pairing(s): Draco/Harry; Harry/OFC (past); Ron/Hermione; others
Rating: PG-15-ish
Summary: Harry Potter always had two left feet and when the Conference of Ministries is held at Hogwarts, he finds himself unable to escape the dancing. To his horror, the only one who can teach him is Draco Malfoy, the resident Potions Master.
Warnings: Humour; snark; a tiny bit of angst; scheming Headmistresses; (hopefully not too irritating) OCs; fake accents of all kinds; and what the cat is doing there I have yet to figure out.
Total word count: ~46,000

Original prompt request number: 199
Fifth prompt at link

Disclaimer: This story/artwork is based on characters and situations created and owned by JK Rowling, various publishers including but not limited to Bloomsbury Books, Scholastic Books and Raincoast Books, and Warner Bros. Inc. No money is being made and no copyright or trademark infringement is intended.

Author's notes: Regarding the dance: It's completely made up, as you might have figured out after reading the story. I wanted to give it some sort of cultural background but I don't know how well I succeeded. Also, I feel that this could have been worked out a bit better than it was, but when I finally had settled upon a plot that would hold beyond 'ohh, shiny!', I had only a couple of weeks to finish it (excuses, I know, I know) and it turned out that I had enough to wrestle this thing into something that even resembled order.
Beta(s): my wife, cueeties_janara, who really hates this pairing but did it (and put up with all my weird experiments including my punctuation and hyphens and semi-colons and what have you) because she loves me. All remaining mistakes are mine.

Negotiations


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Comments 
5th-Oct-2008 02:05 am (UTC)
I quite enjoyed reading this story. I found the plot engaging though the implementation of it a bit patchy in places - such as them arguing over Draco having a portrait of Snape in his lab, and that escalating into a huge argument, but then Harry conveniently overcoming the fact that Draco told him he was only being friendly because Minerva bribed him to. I liked how Harry was angry at being used but some of his rationalisations of Draco's behaviour seemed a little too convenient for the story, but overall it was really well done.

I think the story is lacking in that it doesn't have the resolution between the boys. Well, others may disagree, but after 45,000 words of argument to not get the resolution in the end made the Epilogue a huge let down. I didn't need sex for the resolution; just a way to move forward together - a settling of differences, an admission of attraction and a desire to be together. Not a punch in the face.

That's just my opinion and feel free to ignore it.

Thanks heaps for being part of the fest!
5th-Oct-2008 02:18 am (UTC)
I really liked this fic--it was an engrossing read, and I liked the characterizations of both Harry and Draco. :)

I too thought that the ending was a bit... empty; I wasn't looking for sex (I grinned happily when I saw that this was PG-15), but I had hoped there would be more of, if not a resolution, then a further realization of their own feelings and how they acted upon it. But I liked the Epilogue and the entire story. :)
5th-Oct-2008 05:23 am (UTC)
Nice job. I really enjoyed the story and how you worked the prompt.

I was a bit confused as to why Harry got so mad about Snape's portrait, and I was jolted a bit by the fact that it ended with a punch in the face ... then four years later, they were together. I would have liked to see a bit of the in-between time, when they got past that night. Like others have said, I too wasn't looking for sex, just resolution.

Having said that, I did enjoy the story very much. I liked the gradual development of feelings on both parts. Manipulative McGonagall was an interesting character, and I liked how Draco thought she'd have made a good Slytherin. ;D
5th-Oct-2008 06:39 am (UTC)
Loved it. Great story ^^
5th-Oct-2008 08:06 am (UTC)
The story was a little too draggy for me and I too felt that the ending was unresolved. Still, it was a pleasant read - the dancing lessons were very amusing, there were some lovely interactions between Harry and Draco, and I enjoyed your portrayal of McGonagall. :)
6th-Oct-2008 06:38 am (UTC)
I loved it! I loved it ever so much. The dancing lessons and the banter. Oh the banter was the best part. There would be no Harry and Draco without the banter present, I am sure of it. You really out did yourself with this one. And the Tabby just came out of now where, but I loved her all the same. And I loved the end to pieces.

So basically what you should have gotten form the above was that I was highly pleased with your story and that I loved it.
6th-Oct-2008 06:57 am (UTC)
I enjoyed this story so much - from the dancing lessons to the arguments, and the snark between Harry and Draco. The idea of doing negotiations like this is excellent. Your scheming headmistress made me smile and I loved how she played both boys so very well.

Oh, and the cat *g*

Thank you for taking part and putting a huge smile on my face.
7th-Oct-2008 09:21 am (UTC)
this was very good, but honestly it disappointed me throughout the story i was execting them to get together at the dance then all of a sudden draocs confessing, getting punched and we go to four years later with them remembering events that we never read about. this is good but i think it would be better if we got to see the entire story and not the workings of an epilogue
8th-Oct-2008 08:16 pm (UTC)
I'm glad they finally did get together in the epilogue and that Tabby was still around.

The dance instructions were entertaining and so was the Ball. I did want to bap both of them over the head a few times and especially Harry at the end. :)
9th-Oct-2008 12:47 am (UTC) - Negotiations
Firstly, I, too, was not expecting a punch to the face -- which was why I liked it!

There was a lot of humour which I liked.

"I was joking, Minerva," Harry tried, the sour taste of what could only be fear in the back of his mouth making him queasy. "Ha ha."
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  I swear, that woman is more persistent than a hungry Hippogriff."
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"when I say 'none of your business', in reality I mean 'none of your fucking business, you stupid git!'"


These were lovely:

Music, old and enchanting, floated out into the room and Harry swallowed, his mouth suddenly dry.
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Harry had realized that he missed Draco. Not Malfoy


These felt too ooc:

He did not really mind those games, two could play them after all,
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the scores of brats that passed through his classroom


I just can't picture Harry thinking "brats."

ANd your "The End" was brilliant!

Finite Incantatem
9th-Oct-2008 04:27 pm (UTC)
I found the concept of the negotiations through dance in this fic fascinating. The push-pull of the dance and the entire dynamic of Harry/Draco was well worth the read. Thank you.
11th-Nov-2008 05:05 pm (UTC) - Negotiations
That was fab! <3'd it
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