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Fic: Look Again (PG13) 
4th-Oct-2008 02:59 pm
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Author: tiger_flame
Title: Look Again
Pairing(s): Draco/Harry, Remus/Sirius, slight Remus/Severus and Lily/James
Rating: PG-13
Summary: Without Voldemort to take away the things most special to him, Harry Potter is just a normal boy. Until his godfather is attacked and sent into a coma. Now Harry must figure out a way to keep Sirius’ money out of the Malfoy’s greedy hands and his mind out of Draco’s pants!
Warnings: AU (very, very, very AU…like no Voldy), slash (duh), character death, very little smex (the plot kinda took over, sorry), annoying!Ron, mean and nasty Malfoys...and I think that’s it.
Genre: Angst, Romance and a bit of Humour (if I pulled it off)
Total word count: 17,900+

Original prompt request number: 45
First prompt at link

Disclaimer: This story/artwork is based on characters and situations created and owned by JK Rowling, various publishers including but not limited to Bloomsbury Books, Scholastic Books and Raincoast Books, and Warner Bros. Inc. No money is being made and no copyright or trademark infringement is intended.

Author's notes: Next time, I think I’m going to pick a fest that doesn’t have a deadline the week I move... I did try my best with this, but I wish I’d been able to spend more time. I could list all the things that happened during the writing of this fic, but that would take up too much room. If you’re curious, ask when reveals go up... I got all the additions in, but I’m not sure I got the entire scenario like you wanted. I hope you like it and it’s okay! *hugs*
Beta(s): Rhi for HP, Tori

Look Again


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Comments 
4th-Oct-2008 03:22 pm (UTC)
i love it... draco is so kind and understanding!
5th-Oct-2008 02:12 am (UTC)
There were several things I liked about this story. I loved that even though James and Lily were alive, they didn't actually have a good relationship with Harry. I liked that Sirius and Remus were together, too, and it was interesting to see that in a non-Voldy driven world that Narcissa was the evil one. I also really liked how Draco was very protective of Harry and even though I generally don't like Harry being portrayed as weak and ineffectual, your Harry was fairly sweet. I liked how you described that his memory had holes in it. Well done. The Marauders all being back together was terrific as well.

I felt that your plot had several holes in it, though, for instance why, if Harry showed the letter basically admitting the Malfoy's culpability in the situation, to his friends and the Hospital staff (who knew of the deadline so obviously it was common knowledge), were they not detained and charged? What was the spell Bella used? Why did it take from before term started until Christmas for Harry to contact Bill? And why, seeing as everyone knew what was going on, didn't something as simple as the solution you put forward, become known beforehand?

Overall, I did enjoy reading the story, though, thank you so much for being part of the fest.
5th-Oct-2008 05:24 am (UTC)
It was definitely interesting to read about a world without Voldemort, and to see all the differences and similarities between this world and the actual one. I enjoyed how protective Draco is towards Harry, and how cute Sirius and Remus are together. However, I do agree with jamie2109 that there are quite a few jarring plot holes, and I thought the numerous parentheses at the start detracts one from the storyline as well. Perhaps you just need more time to work out the kinks with a beta.
6th-Oct-2008 02:57 am (UTC)
I love the way Draco and Harry's relationship developed. The part where Draco told Harry about being inherited was very touching; the subsequent kiss after that revelation felt very much like Draco choosing Harry and their love over material wealth, which is romantic. I think the most beautiful part of the whole thing was the end, with Harry's hopeful internal monologue.

That said, I also wished there was some closure, particularly over how the Malfoys are punished, because I think they should be punished. I also would like to know what happens to Remus. I hope the additions include these as well, but if not, at least they answered the plot holes that the reviewers before me mentioned.

Nonetheless, it was an interesting read. A world without Voldemort and Harry 's life is still difficult. What a jarring notion. This is one I'll be pondering over and over.
6th-Oct-2008 06:41 am (UTC)
I very much enjoyed reading this. I enjoyed how Harry and Draco's story developed. Draco was just so sweet and still Draco, mostly. I liked the idea of everything not happening on the Voldemort front, but it was a bit sad that things still ended up the way they did with Harry's family. And the ending was ever so sweet.
7th-Oct-2008 06:39 am (UTC)
That was really sad.
7th-Oct-2008 08:44 pm (UTC)
I really enjoyed this! Overall, I think it could have used a stronger beta (I found a few errors, but I'm a nitpicker), but I really loved how you created the story.

One thing I *didn't* like was the fact that more didn't happen with those flashes of Harry's "other" life that he sometimes dreamed. I thought that was the most fascinating part of your whole story. I would have loved to see that explored more deeply. I thought that was a great idea.

I liked how their relationship developed, too. I think the pace felt very natural, and I liked your characterizations. I thought it was an interesting choice to have James and Lily be kind of absentee, mirroring the real canon, despite the AU storyline.

Very nice job!

*hugs*
23rd-Oct-2008 04:30 am (UTC)
*hugs* I can finaly reply to this! Yay!

Thank you so much for reading this! I was going to have more with the flashed of the 'other' life, but I ran out of time, i had to get TWO extensions in the first place!!

*hugs* I'm so glad you thought it was good. Thank you so much, you don't know what that means!!!
8th-Oct-2008 04:04 am (UTC)
I finally finished it. Better late than never I guess.

To be perfectly honest there are alot of missing parts that I still do not understand but then again if you had added all the missing moments and back story you would be writing it for years.

I liked that Draco supported Harry when no one else did (not really anyway) and I actually liked that Sanpe was helping Remus as best he could while remaining in character.

I fell bad that even in a Voldy free world Harry's life is still tragic.
9th-Oct-2008 07:58 pm (UTC)
that was so sad T_T.

Very moving, and so very sad, how Harry is left alone by his family in the end, though Draco is by his side. and I really pity Remus, losing his love...

can I get a sequel where Harry and Draco continue their life and hw Harry gets over his loss?

This was so intense on the emotionas.. I want more!
11th-Oct-2008 05:42 am (UTC)
That was really an interesting AU. Especially with Harry still having a rough life even though Voldemort wasn't around and his parents were. *sniffle* about Sirius.

Ah, Narcissa, as the evil witch was a good choice. ;)

I really did like Draco being so protective.
6th-Nov-2008 08:38 pm (UTC) - Look again
*cries*
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